Dana’s
post on the Slice of Life blog this morning about writing not what you see but what you hear, taste, smell, feel was inspiring. I’m a very
visual person, learning mostly through my eyes, so this is a particular
challenge for me. When I went out for errands this afternoon, I thought I’d try
it.
It was sunny,
but windy. Wind gusts broke like surf, and I buried my face in my scarf. It
buffeted me both front and back, especially as I crossed the streets that led
toward Riverside Park. But it wasn’t cutting, as it is when the temperature is
much colder. When the wind ebbed, the air was almost balmy, especially when I
walked through small areas of sun. Stopping in a new bookstore, I was wrapped
in warmth and quiet.
Outside,
car and truck engines grumbled and churned as they idled at red lights or turned
off of or onto Broadway. Rich meat aroma from a halal food truck parked
curbside enveloped me, rousing my olfactory tastebuds.
A
three-year-old girl with her hand in her mother’s was not happy about the
weather. “Mommy, I want to go home,” she repeated many times, as they followed
me for a couple of blocks. Another small child just cried. Wisps of voices from
people passing in the opposite direction brought sound but no coherent sentences,
except from one couple arguing. At least, she
was yelling, “You got yours,” as they passed me, while he was silent.
This is such an incredible slice. I felt like I was with you and I know I was not. You captured the energy and diversity in your world. I did not need a picture. Wonderful writing.
ReplyDeleteI am so proud of you for trying to "write without sight" I want to try it but haven't. It really worked here for you. Especially the description of the rich meat aroma enveloping you...it took me to a place where I have smelled that before. I also could heard the mumbled wispy voices you described on the street. Great job!
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